00:01
Number eight, the sentence is, another investigating psychologist who finds value in healthy mental states, martin seligman is one.
00:11
You might notice that this takes you in a couple different directions, muddies up the meaning.
00:16
Chances are, our goal with fixing this is just going to be finding the clearest route through.
00:22
So check g.
00:23
Martin seligman, interesting, martin seligman was meant to be one.
00:29
Okay, martin seligman, also finding value in healthy mental state investigation, is another psychologist.
00:36
This is clearer.
00:38
So i would say since it's clearer than f, we can get rid of f.
00:41
However, notice that this big thing inside the commas is a big parenthetical.
00:46
That means that the main part of the sentence, according to the way it's written, is this part.
00:51
Martin seligman is another psychologist.
00:54
Fine.
00:55
However, we'd say, what is contained inside that parenthetical? is pretty important.
01:01
The main idea is not that martin seligman is a psychologist.
01:04
The main idea is that he is a psychologist who finds value in healthy mental state investigation.
01:10
So this construction helps the grammar, but it muddies the clarity of the sentence.
01:16
So for that reason, i would say we can get rid of g...